Fantasy Story Opening

[Josh]

Posted this on deviantART and I am going to continue updating it on there as I get feedback. I wrote it in about 10 minutes earlier so it's in the early stages (;

So cold and so dark. Fael had to resist the temptation of creating a tiny flame to warm her body from the piercing chill that lay around her.
Three years ago, when she was twelve, magic had been made illegal and almost every family that had it flowing through their veins had either been executed or exiled. It was different for Fael though, for her family had gone into hiding in the mountains of Konodor that loomed over the capital city of Hersh.
She was hidden with her family, or what was left of it - Maelgie, her mother and Liem, her younger brother of twelve - and was well hidden. What was the problem with using magic then? The city was well guarded and any signs of magic, like the glow of a flame, in unreachable places, like their cave, was investigated immediatly for who else apart from Magefolk, as they were called, would get there?
Oh how Fael longed to use her magic but her mother always said no! She hated it but she respected her mothers wishes.
But then again, surely just a small bit wouldn't hurt...
The urge was overwhelming. She looked inside herself and located her source of magic. To her it was a light blue sphere of light with rivulets of magic ebbing and flowing from it. She drew on her power, willing a flame to keep her warm...
A burst of blue light shot through the cave and out into the open sky; a shockwave racing through the air untill slowly fading into nothingness. Her stomach dropped to her feet. What she done... the whole city would have seen that and she would have caused the death of her family. She glanced over at her mother and Liem. They were fast asleep. I'm Sorry she thought, while sobbing.

[Psycological Pain]

I don't get it.